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ObdurateMiller

  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Culprit

    That was great, even if it was kind of sad. It was very short but I still liked it. Keep writing because you're pretty good at it. Good luck. (Also, ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Dressed with a Tie

    Very long but very great. I really liked it but happier is better. I felt hooked from the beginning and never lost interest. I hope to read another piece by ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: You'll Find My Will Under The Bed

    Umm, can I ask the purpose of writing this? From the title, I thought it'd be alot different. I guess that's what I get for judging a book by it's ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: I'm With This Boy

    That was very good and I'm sorry your boyfriend was stupid enough to treat you wrong. No girl deserves that. The one thing I didn't like was that, if it's ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: I Know Something You Don't Know

    It was really good and I liked how you repeated "I know something you don't know". It's definitly a lot like middle school and elementary school kids. I liked it ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Why Turn Away?

    Your very true but its hard to trust people now adays because people lie and manipulate others. I wish life was without suffering but if there was no suffering, you'd ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: I'm A Jesus Freak

    I really liked it and can relate because my closest friend is a Christian. She tells me all about Jesus and God and I believe too. You're completely right throughout ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: If I Had A Title For This It Would Be Up Here

    The sarcasm in your title got me to look. I don't know why you have a survey asking for flaws because you first chapter was great. It was beyond detailed ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Life She Wanted

    Hi, I'm new to YWS and I saw the title of you poem and it really caught my attention. I liked it a lot and I think you did really ...

    Nov 29, 2011


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