Nox

What can I say, this was well written. When you wrote 'You're the encyclopedia of worthless information' I was remimnded of my own grandma who tells me anything and everything ...

On the previously day most of the tents had been put up, the children had never seen so many people at the house before and got in the way of ...

It was Mr. Morgan, who kept the bookshop, who taught me my letters, Mrs. B taught me to steal. It reas better if you take out the last comma and ...

This is really creative especially the Tube. I really liked it. :D My favourite part was: Lorin released the pressure on his boots and floated towards her; he grabbed her ...

That's never happened to me before, sometimes you can actually ignore the rule. I liked this, nice and short and reminds me of myself when I'm looking through bookshelves. :D

A poem about streaks? :P It wasn't too bad so I did like it. :D

Colour code : Quote: blue , Comments: black, Corrections/Suggestions: olive , Extra: red . Here's my review: burrowed himself father into the little hovel The correct words are 'further' or ...

I'm liking it. :D But I'm sure I'll be the one correcting all the spellings again. :wink: I also like the character of Rupo, I'll add my review later.

“About the funeral. It’s tomorrow, as you know, and we’ll be burying her at St. Catherine’s cemetery. Two o’ clock. You’ll be the only one there, apart from a few ...

Colour code: Quotes = blue , Comments = black, Corrections/Suggestions = olive , Extras = red . Here’s my review: “Yossi! What happened to you achi (brother)?” exclaimed Ari, as ...

Colour code: Quotes = blue , Comments = black, Corrections/Suggestions = olive , Extras = red . Here’s my review: cheerfull correction: cheerful . vilage correction: village It was just ...

Colour code: Quotes = blue , Comments = black, Suggestions = olive . nazi, catholic, torah, december . These all need to start with capital letters. Nazi, Catholic, Torah, December ...

There are still a few mistakes but apart from that I liked it. This is pretty good if you're new to writing, try to use the spellchecker on Word before ...

Here’s my review: her posture and vacant ness in her eyes . It’s vacantness not vacant ness . My favourite part was the description of Orhilina: Her dusky complexion and ...

This is a great story, I loved it. I can't say more about the dialogue than what J.Haux said. There were 18 members of the group it should be 'eighteen' ...