Published November 30, 2005
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Thank you for reading, I edited it again. I like the Tube idea as well. I'm going to use it for my other Sci-Fi prose.
My stupid keyboard needs bassing. XD
I need a new one.
This is really creative especially the Tube. I really liked it.
My favourite part was:
Lorin released the pressure on his boots and floated towards her; he grabbed her by the hair and floated down again; ignoring her cries. He untied the robe from her waist and shoulders, Alice sighed and nearly floated away again but Lorin caught her hand.
But I think it was meant to be rope not robe.
The centre of attention was plumb man known as Knave Droopa The centre of attention was a plumb man know as Knave Droop.
Droops pushed the button. Droop pushed the button.
Thanks for reading, I've edited in the rest of the story.
Psh, of course it's humorous! With words like "Gooblegog," how could it not be? I agree that this was well done--very creative and vivid. Post more soon!
My God you found it funny? I never knew I could write anything that could be considered funny. Thank you for commenting and I think I'll get the rest done tomorrow.
I nearly deleted it.
You did a good job with this! It's funny and creative.