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What nickelpickle said pretty much covered what I think of it. Great job; those repetitions really reinforce the point. Yeah, and change the last line and the last line in ...

Sorry Emma, but it looks like someone beat ya to it... Anyways, I like it too. It's short and to the point, and conveys the message well.

That's crazy awesome! I am deeply impressed with your writing. Is this the same novel as the other post with Asher, or something different? Either way, I think you did ...

Awesome writing, Misty! I like how you have the sort of mental monologue when Asher thinks he's going to die. Without that, it wouldn't have sounded as good. Great job, ...

I like it! I'm just a little bit confused about the theme- is the person supposed to be falling in love, or is just naive?

That kind of stuff can get annoying if people don't care about what they say. Anyways, for further enrichment, read Boundless (in the Fantasy section). It has the same characters ...

I dunno Hunter, what about Eighth Grade?

They still use the electric chair in a couple of states, but that's as an alternative to lethal injection. As for me, I was originally for the death penalty because ...

I'm not that elaborate! Wow! NIce writing, Hunter! I know I've read this before, but it looks like you changed it -ish. I loke how Bob sneaks up on Hunter ...

Wait no longer! Chapter 1 With a sharp cry, I jumped out of my bed, fully awake. Sweat covered my body and saturated my thick, blonde, curly hair. Heading to ...

Yay! Someone besides Hunter commented on my story! LOL Thanks for the comments. I was like super-inspired when I wrote that part, so it may just turn out to be ...

That's awesome, man! I like that style. As for a title... "The Loser on the Bus just Sits Around" I dunno. Sounds funny to me.

LOL that's prettty good.

Maybe some punctuation could help. Nice poem. Depressing, but good.

I like the style of this. It's funny too. Good job.