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Re: night
Really, all it needs is a few commas. And. That's. It. So, pop a few in, and this is pretty much amazing!! Though, the tenderness of a baby girl's eyes ...
Apr 5, 2014 -
Re: Earthquake
Nit picking is all this needs, so here we go! So… three sections and on each, there are different capitalizations on each. "If" then "into" and "she" while on the ...
Apr 5, 2014 -
Re: a bullet's kiss
Wow. Let me just sat that…. wow. Images were in very line, as people portray a kiss as something nice and safe, and, well….. a bullet really isn't that safe! ...
Mar 22, 2014 -
Re: Memories.
A very sweet and sorta-make-you-want-to-cry poem, but it sort of jumped around, and for maximum crying skills, I think you could draw the last bit out a tad more, the ...
Mar 20, 2014
