Noelle

Hi there! The new doctor, Doctor Chamberlin, gestures for me to sit down in the chair in front of his desk. This may be just a personal preference, but I'm ...

Hi there! Harrison nods, without a word . You did this a lot in this chapter. I think there's at least three times that you told us Harrison did something ...

Hi there! Salian strides into the room, tossing one of his guards the keys. "Hold her, and take no risks. We've never captured her, and I want her head." I ...

Hi there! He did something between a whimper and grunt in reply I think it would work better if you said Mousse 'made a sound somewhere between' instead of saying ...

Hi there! Before I start, I was just wondering if there's a reason this is titled level 0.2 and not 0.1? I'm just wondering... We stopped at a house with ...

Hi there! Real quick before I forget, this chapter is entitled Chapter Three. I think you meant for it to be Chapter Two :3 So I see you took my ...

Hi there! The sound of crackling thunder shook the ground and along with it, a harsh string of lightning snaked towards the tree far ahead of us, once it made ...

Hi there! They’d remain, hanging there for days—for as long as we followed this road, sometimes —and it was only until we got to what we figured was the end ...

Hi there! In all honesty, I was so surprised when I read the part where Carl blacked out. That was the most intense part of the chapter and I was ...

Hi there! I'm not the one you'd come from if you wanted a review packed with nitpicks. But I do have a grammar nitpick for you before I get started. ...

Hi there! I read the first chapter of this, but I didn't post a review because there were already enough quality reviews. I didn't want to end up repeating what ...

Hi there! He had not heard word from the traders who made their way to Iberian for many days…and the sailors at the docks said a large storm was bearing ...

Hi there! Ah, the villain is here, just like you promised. And may I say that he is one interesting fellow. he realized he was in the interrogation room of ...

Hi there! First off, when someone new is talking, or someone talks after not talking for a while, the dialogue should begin a new paragraph. There's only one part in ...

Hi there! First off, I'd like to compliment you on your dialogue. In the description of this chapter, you said that this would be about kingdoms and a dictator and ...