Noelle

Hi there! Gah, I was so happy when I saw you posted this! I've been waiting to read more :) As I sat in Father's car with Mousse at my ...

Hi there! Ah, I'm so excited you posted this! Here's a little nitpick to start off my review: I sigh and hold my breath when Calvin places the dagger on ...

Hi there! I have to say, the time jump you used here is absolutely genius. Especially since you ended the last chapter on such a cliffhanger. Now I'm stuck with ...

Hi there! Gah, you're killing me here! Juno needs to like Ben already. Why does she have to be so confused? They need to be together! Okay, now that I've ...

Hi there! Wow, so we're getting into something intense here. I could really feel the tension in the house as well as the fear that Mella was feeling. Good job ...

Hi there! She slouched on the bed, yawning and blinking as she tried to focus on her surroundings. This doesn't really come across the way that you wanted it to. ...

Hi there! So Ben and I walk, and for a while it’s too loud in the hallways to say anything. And that’s nice. Just walking. I feel like the 'just ...

Hi there! Sorry it took me while to get to this. But I'm here now! :) Do the troubles in Frey's life ever end? He's had some rotten luck xD ...

Hi there! Melanna Walfield sat cross-legged on the two seater armchair Just a nitpick here. A two seater armchair would be a loveseat or a sofa. An armchair is made ...

Hi there! I'm really fond of the way you introduce characters. Sometimes it's hard to introduce and describe characters without making it sound force. 'Cause you have to have the ...

Hi there! Do you like to end your chapters with such depressing things? xD Everything was going great for Tamara and then, bam, she gets home. I am a bit ...

Hi there! I'm back for chapter 2 as I said I would be :) Okay, so this chapter is just as short as the first one. I kind of hoped ...

Hi there! So I'm going to start out with some things I'd like to point out and then I'm going to give you my overall impression. Alright, let's get started ...

Hi there! So I have the teeniest of nitpicks here. “Hold on Ato,” Fleta started There should be a comma before 'Ato'. Whenever someone is talking and mentions someone's name ...

Hi there! So this is the last of your introductory chapters. I have to say you did a good job with them. Even though it's not really a prologue, I'm ...