Nobunaga

No problem! I'm happy if I can help :3

Oh! And I edited part one to say this, but the corpse he was holding was Fa'una. I know you read it before I edited it to say that...

Okay! Thank you for your points. I'm gonna go in and try to more effort into editing the long ones. I really appreciate it!

I need to like read an article on how to vary sentence length. This time I even noticed myself doing it but I still couldn't figure out a way to ...

Okay! First of all, I just wanna say again that I do really like this story and where it's going lol As for Damon, I think just having her ask ...

Okay, I made some quick changes, just to try and clear up a few things but any further editing is going to have to wait until the full chapter is ...

I think instead of saying in the beginning that the mom got a strength upgrade, you can just say that she got a new stronger body, and maybe just add ...

Oh, wow, that was kinda long lol

Thank you, Kanome! It's not a prologue, the next part picks up right after this. And I kept it short because everything I have written is unedited and excuses excuses. ...

Thank you so much for reviewing this! How weird, I just reviewed something with lots of long sentences. It's so hard to notice when you're doing it yourself. I really ...

I just assumed it was a chapter one, I'm sorry lol But now that you explain it, it all makes sense. Actually I like it even better now that I ...

That makes me so freakin sad... I'll pay more attention to the tags next time...

WHAT DO YOU MEAN???? NOOOO!

Also, how did you make a gif your profile picture??