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Okay, so I really liked this piece, and I have but one nitpick. (inner author: Haha, seriously, one? No one's that good. Me: Yes, seriously. And she was that good. ...

OK, I actually thought the the rhythm was alright. However, maybe you should have started a new paragraph with "But the Bible also helps me keep these thoughts subdued", because ...

Well, this was good. Nitpick: "The next time I was in a bright room, that smelled sharply of alcohol." Wording: Goood. Comma: BAAAAD. Kill it! Complaint: My only one is ...

Well, this is a first. I have no nitpicks, no complaints, no grammatical errors, nothing. WOW. Consider yourself successful. You have rendered me without critique. I actually really like the ...

I thought I would bash you because I love The Only Exception, but it being Harry Potter.. well, you're safe from the wrath of Hannahsaur. Sometimes the rhythm was off ...

... Well. I think that if you spruced it up a little, it could be... better. However, I do think you should think about what you're putting into this site, ...

Kay-kay! I'm Ninja, I'll be your reviewer for today. What I would change it to This had to be a dream . I turned around . T he kitchen had ...

Aw, this is cute! 'Fraid I can't give a full a on review 'cause I honestly don't know how to, but I'll try. I liked the definitions, they were sweet ...

Mmkay! You asked, and shall receive! What I would change it to The streets were brightly lit, something that hardly made an impression on me anymore. I sat in the ...

Cool poem. What was the assignment? Nitpick time! Capitalization, first of all, was nonexistent. In line 6, did you mean 'pursuing'? 'Twas a bit short; a continuation would have been ...

Good piece, but I have to nitpick you on block paragraph. I agree totally, even though I have no younger siblings, let alone a younger brother. I went through the ...

O.O *clears throat* Right. Um, one thing I noticed is that you are quite fond of cussing. It fit the piece, but I would make sure that you don't go ...

HOLY COW. If you don't continue this, I will hunt you down. I am so intrigued it's not even funny. Seriously. Do not discontinue this. I will not be pleased. ...

Well, I'm no poet, but this was promising. You could touch it up a bit, maybe refine it. Some ending words seemed out of place, but I could be wrong; ...

Hi Sunny! Ok, so this was good! A very good base for a story- maybe as a prologue or something? But anyway. I think that it would make a bit ...