Nike

this is so cute! I loved it. But you should split this up into verses and choruses because I dont know how this goes. but other than that this was ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS. I hope that you will have a great time here! Now to reviewing... I wasn't really excited to red this because of the length. You didn't ...

I agree with Ladynagrom. You should edit the parts she marked. I thought that it was boring. I heard this same knd of story. You should pop something in here ...

Hello! I'm gonna review your story today! I'm Nike. The bold red are my comments. That summer was the beginning. It was when I began. Began to listen, to see, ...

I loved this! The desciption was brilliant! It was a bit boring and not refreshing. alot of people write about the beach. Edit the parts the writers above me mentioned. ...

helllo. I know why you aren't getting many comments. The story is a little dead. We've read it all before. Try to spruse it up and at a little suprise ...

I agree with Jet on everything. It's a whole different story then others write. I like it because of the difference from different stories. But you should edit some parts ...

okay, Hi babygirl12! When I first saw the title, I thought someone re-wrote the real song by Natasha Bedingfield or they just chose the same title and wrote something familular ...

hi Litehawk. This piece is very different than the rest I have read before. I don't usually stop by Lyric Poetry until I say this one. It is nice but ...

hi! I agree with KD 100%. You do have many errors and your pace is way too fast-sometimes I was completely confused! Some words were spelled wrong and didn’t even ...

This has a great start. But you need to be aware of your tences- you sometimes go from past tence to present to future and you can't do that. You ...

this is great but you need more description-it feels as if the characters are standing and talking in nothing. Some words are spelled wrong or you missed some. The truth ...

Great- im agreeing with the writers above me. This is very interesting but you sometimes mix up the names, check that out. And in the begining you wrote Mickey; teenage ...

AMAZING! One of the best works I ever read on YWS. This was perfect :D Nike :)

okkkay. i know why no one is commenting here. the story is just SO long that it just scares the reader like "ah!!!" you gotta cut it into parts or ...