Niebla

Hey ladymarmalade, I loved this story! I noticed a few minor errors, but overall I thought the writing was really good. It was deep and drew you into the story, ...

Hey saphira10, First of all - I do like your writing. I think that this story overall needs a bit of revising because I noticed a few minor mistakes and ...

I like the concept of the story, and think this will make a nice novel; carry on with it. However, I noticed a few little mistakes even in this snippet. ...

Hello, I really like this! I love the way you've written it, from the point of view of the mare. I found some of the sentences in italics a bit ...

My completely honest opinion? This poem is okay- not one of the best ones I've read, but not too bad either. I think I prefer the beginning, to be honest, ...

I like the general idea of it and think it could be quite nice. However, there are a few things which just don't quite make sense to me and I ...

I love this. I love the detail in which you describe the pain the character is going through. You use a different range of words and images and the story ...

Hello, First of all, I loved this poem! The images this poem brought to mind were perfect, and the words you chose flowed really well. Although it is a long ...

I loved reading this. It's a very clear yet almost dreamy poem, and I love the images that it creates. There is one thing I'd like to point out: surrounded ...

I really like this. The way it was written was really clever; I must have read it about ten times starting at different points before I could hit the "reply" ...

I love this. It sounds like the kind of music I love listening to; sad but quite meaningful. I love some of your choices of words. I would love to ...

Hello, First of all, I did like it overall, although I think you could make a lot of improvements to it. It was a nice children's story; meaning that it ...

I like this piece. The atmosphere and the words and expressions you use flow quite nicely. First of all, there are a few things I would point out: I can ...

In my opinion this story was okay. I definitely liked some parts of it, but personally it's not the kind of thing I'd usually read because it's very typical-teenager, if ...

Well done with this; I really, really like it. I love the phrases you used and the atmosphere they created, but most of all I love the dialogue: it flows ...