Nephthys

Sometimes though, the sun shines through, and I swear that I see you. You must be happy there, engulfed by the golden rays of the sun, never feeling cold or ...

I think you really need to read more. I honestly didn't really read this. Your grammar and spelling need serious work, but more importantly you show absolutely no knowledge of ...

When it comes to the sudden, no one can expect it. Duh?.... There is no defense against it. It usually defies all logic, and does not fit with the world. ...

I think this story is a little confusing. I feel like most of your dialogue is extremely inverted. Ex: "Why would I joke about such a serious matter as this ...

First of all, PLEASE organize your work into paragraphs. No one wants to read a big block of text. Also, this seems way too short to be a complete scene. ...

Cleona turned around quickly when she heard voices coming from a room in the hallway. Not a a great opening line. It's not particularly smooth or interesting. She walked with ...

Ok. So here’s the deal. I was born VERY informal. It makes me want to stop reading the story right now. Also, be very wary of first person. I find ...

This is quite long, so I can't do an in-depth critique. I really like the tone of this piece. I found it interesting (if a bit long), and I enjoyed ...

The best book I have ever read! Ever. I got it from the library yesterday and I'm already finished it. It is one of those books that you can just ...

Taking a step closer to the edge I looked over the side. Clouds covered the massive expanse that I gazed into, I find this phrase awkward. covered and expanse don't ...

First of all, NEVER trash your own writing like that. You are setting yourself up for failure. If you notice problems in your work, use the EDIT button to fix ...

Although she didn't need it. Why would she need to be slapped? Haround him, hell swirled and burned Not really getting this. It seems too epic for the circumstances. "The ...

First of all I was SO excited when I saw this. I'm currently writing a musical about Edgar Allan Poe (but it's a very different interpretation than yours), and it's ...

I won't address the punctuation, since that's already been done. As I walked down the stairs I was shocked to find myself faced with a field of roses, Meredith’s face ...

1) The Picture of Dorian Gray - Oscar Wilde (Also every play he ever wrote, in particular An Ideal Husband) Words cannot express the love I feel for Oscar Wilde. ...