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Oh, I see ! You edited it on the same post! Okay, so that's perfectly fine - normal routine, actually - it's just that someone like me find it easier ...

Hey - I got a bit grouchy this morning since I wrote something here and the computer ate it...but I returned. ^^ talking of michelangelo I can picture you having ...

Hey! I meant that I read it till over halfway - as I got more and more into the story, it became easier (indeed, it was just so FUNNY to ...

Hmmm...that was an interesting experiment in spacing and...I'm not entirely sure it worked! (Yes, I'm going to critique my own advice here, but then again, I am at liberty to, ...

Hey! Thanks for clarifying that up - and no, I like to know what's going on in the writer's minds when writing. That's the reason why I try and get ...

Reminder to myself to give this the wonderfully long review it deserves. Expect to see something here.

Eli - have a read, have a write, whatever you feel like.:D Of course, since it's after the comp, nitpicks probably won't help a great deal (although I agree, there's ...

Thanks Ky, kidashka, Evi! I wonder what is bothering about the 'kg.' It looks weird, agreed. Read it aloud, though. See what that sounds like; my mouth forms the letters ...

So, I see you've taken another hack at this, trying to be less obvious about the emotion you want to create and focussing a little more on the imagery and ...

You know...I still think you have a beautiful idea here, and whether or not you choose to do much with it is all up to you. I also noticed an ...

So, this is an idea a friend came up with - and I can't believe I didn't notice the symbolism before - if, that is, it is correct. My aura ...

Great! I can't wait to see it! And remember to keep me informed about what happens with it, okay? >>Evi - I didn't actually set out to write that much ...

Ouch. I didn't realise I was so far off the mark. Of course, in the first act, it makes perfect sense, now - I always had this idea that the ...

It's good to know you know exactly what you're doing with this. If disjointed is the effect you're going for - well done - you've done it! Just note that ...

I see you've done a rewrite - it'd actually have been quite helpful for me if you'd left the original version up there (maybe in a spoiler?) just so I'd ...