Nate

I think you did a pretty good job with the dragon battle scene. Writing such scenes is definitely tough, but you did a good job with it. If you haven't ...

A poetic epigram! Aka, couplets. Couplets are like quotes for poetry. That is, they're quick snippets meant to quickly convey an idea in just two lines. Furthermore, they call attention ...

This has a lot of dialogue. That's not a bad thing, but it means you need to work on making sure the dialogue sounds different for each character. In this ...

First, continue writing this. The story is good, and finishing the novel should be what you're concentrating right now. When you go back and edit, concentrate on your sentence structure. ...

Just a few things to note! Show rather than tell You've probably heard this a thousand times, and like I was, you probably find the advice frustrating. No matter what, ...

Looks good! But I'd make a change to the way the chapter is structured. Right now, it begins with a lot of description. A lot of description. It seemed somewhat ...

Good start! A few things to work on: Verb tenses You start off your chapter in the present tense, but then move into the past tense with the first piece ...

Looks like you have a good start here! One of the things I think you need to work on are descriptions. Right now, your story moves along at a very ...

I thought this was really good. Your dialogue is well done, and you get a strong sense of each of the characters. But it does need proofreading. There are some ...

Reviewing lyrics is always bit weird because it's meant to be heard rather than read. That said, this seems uneven, and I believe that's because of the rhyming scheme. Verse ...

I thought this was really good. You have a knack for descriptions and dialogue, and the story flowed naturally from one scene to the next. I also really like your ...

I found the switch between the singular and the plural in the second stanza to be somewhat off-putting. The poem seems predicated on the notion that we are individuals with ...

Flash fiction can be extremely difficult to do. Most fiction is about what's in front of you, but flash fiction is about what you leave out. It's the details the ...

Heh, it's good you don't brag about it! It's not very good to be honest, but that's perfectly okay. There are primarily two things that are going wrong: 1. The ...

The flow and the rhythm of the piece is fantastic. Nonetheless, I think the poem gets lost in itself. There is so much verbal obfuscation going on that I'm left ...