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This reminds me of one of my Great Aunts when I was younger. She used to smoke all the time, and as a kid, I always suppressed the urge to ...

You have a good, clear writing style and I didn't notice any grammatical errors so it's clear you have taken time in developing this piece. However, the story is also ...

Heh, there's a lot that's wrong with this story ZYLF! But that's okay; it's the same with all of us. Firstly though, please watch your grammar even in normal posts! ...

Heh, I found this piece amusing. It doesn't really look like you're looking for an in-depth review, but you do need to proofread your work more. There were a lot ...

Hey there tamtam, When writing a poem or lyrics, you don't need to rhyme the lines. Getting rhyming right is extremely tricky, and something that not even the best poets ...

I have to agree with Firestarter. If this person really causes you to feel this way, then why resort to time-worn cliches and trite phrases? You need to speak as ...

Good experiment, but not quite right. As smaur pointed out, part of the problem is the text in between the stars. The problem is that they're mostly adjectives with no ...

Aye, I was confused too. Is this a replacement chapter, or a continuation from the previous? In any case, on the formatting not staying, it's because the post box on ...

I haven't read the previous three chapters, so feel free to discard my review in its entirety. A few hours later they passed through Omaha and into Council Bluffs, Iowa. ...

The first three lines are good, but the poem slips from there. The quiescent motion captures me like a frame capturing a portrait What does this mean? Your imagery is ...

Heh, Crass sounds a bit contradictory. If they're anti-Christianity and anti-Capitalist, then doesn't it take courage to be a Christian Capitalist in their presence? They're pro-courage, so that shoul

I normally don't like romance poems, but this was actually pretty good. It shows polish, and the fact you've already incorporated some of the critiques shows that you care about ...

I really liked this. Reminds me of a 1930s mystery novel. “I’m part of organization”, he sputtered out, “One that’s a little short on money. Need some rich folks to ...

I'm going to take a guess that this piece of prose is meant to mark the occasion of the Australian apology to the Aborigines back in 2008. Not everyone will ...

You may be singing this, but if you're posting it, you should at least run a spell-check on it. Otherwise, I'm left with the impression that you don't care about ...