Myth

Um.. gypsy camp? They actually went to a graveyard hence the stone slabs (tombstones). I was really plain, just a clearing for graves. This is for a Fantasy Fools contest ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * I was used to being alone. I lived alone in my apartment, I never had all that many friends, and I’ve never been ...

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Interesting foreword. I’m not much of a poetry critic but the poem used short details to describe the events without being longwinded. It had an air of Tolkien-ism about it.

I see what you mean. Sometimes you get people who want descriptions of characters so I just it it a bit. I think I'll take your suggestion and move it ...

Aeroman : Welcome to the site again! I see your already getting to work by critiquing. Snoink : Oh my God! Snoink commented on my work and liked it. *dies ...

Every ‘child-abuse’ based short stories I’ve read go too much into detail on bruises and the violent abuse they suffer but you narrowed it down, still leaving impressions on what ...

Wings : No complaints at all? :wink: Phorcys : Yup. I've been working on it for a very long time and hopefully the fortune-teller scene will still serve its purpose. ...

Thanks for the compliment *beams* I like to go for traditional stuff and most books I have read usually have wizards/mages with birth names that they keep hidden as a ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Mum ignored my question, walked briskly into the sitting room and resumed a spot on the wooden bench, next to ...

I love autumn and the picture created from reading this.

I agree with all the above. Posting a short extract doesn't really give a clear picture of what the story is about.

You really would need a lot of bullets if you're going to be shoting as a punishment. :wink:

From the very beginning (you may remember) I said it was Samuel. Now I find it hard as each character has something about them that draws attention and I can't ...

I really like the last stanza. I tried reading with the last bit as the first stanza and to me it was better. I'm not too keen on rhyming so ...