Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: A really short piece that...uhh...doesn't really have a plot exactly but it is a nice little tale nonetheless and the poem at the end is a pretty nice touch to it. It sounds pretty good and overall its a nice little story. Not much of a message or anything but it's well written and certainly enjoyable. The setting seems heavily inspired by something like Tolkien and that's definitely not a bad thing just that it doesn't seem to be too unique.
Anyway let's get right to it,
The Men were the strongest in numbers and tactics, yet political struggle from within caused their downfall. A joint alliance between the Elves and Dwarves brought them to a final end on the Great Bankshire Hills.
Neat entrance there. Men and their politics. Of course that would happen.
The Dwarves, not content with the Elves' claim over the hills, went underground in an effort to strengthen their forces and wait out their elven counterparts' siege of their lands. A horrible plague swept across their enormous subterranean web of cities and killed the majority of their kind. A distinct smell emanated from the victims, leading to the Dwarven proverb, "Walk not where death's smell is putrid." Many suspected that the Elves had something to do with the outbreak.
Ouch that must have been a horrible time to be a part of and this is soo much more relevant to these days but of course you could not have had any idea about that.
The last kingdom to fall was that of the superstitious Gnomes. They were easily exterminated by the highly advanced Elves and it was said that the Elven king himself actually drank the blood of those he killed from a golden chalice, a symbol of Elvish purity.
By this point I think its pretty clear that the elves are advance with the whole plague thing and all that so I don't think that you need to spell that out again.
The Elves, the only remaining race, left the lands by sea, searching for new lives and a second chance. What they found was not at all what they had expected, and instead of a new thriving society, their race slowly came to an end.
Typical...bad decisions by the elves there.
Aaand that's it for that. The poem sounds good but I can't really review it because I'm not very good at things related to poetry in general.
Overall: It's a nice short piece, sounds like a fun legend from a history or something like that and I think that's what you were going for so that's great. And that's about all I have to say for this one. Nothing to really get into with this thing.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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