Myth

To be honest I critiqued this before and I had no idea who this character was and I would have suggested changes but the author didn't reply to any critiques ...

Is this a prologue? I usually don't like prolgues but this was interesting with all the 'We' and I got the feeling this was many people speaking one after the ...

Hi. Welcome to the site. Have you read the rules yet? You are to critique at least two other literary pieces before posting your own work. * Green = Comment/Correction ...

Is this meant to be a chapter or a prologue? I have no idea who this 'she' is and why she is running. There is no introduction and I didn't ...

I would say this prologue was telling much about the story but the world it is set in. It seems like this is a 'summary' for the basic introduction to ...

While Wiggy gets her own critique done I'll post mine. * Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * “Move boy!” The lion of a man screamed at ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I crouched low to the ground, my back brushing against the wall. I forced myself to breathe, stay calm, and ...

Hi, As you've critiqued my work I'm returning the favour with, what i hope, is a helpful critique. Green = Comment/Correct Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Seagulls are ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * Outside, a cool breeze entered her window and she tried to settle into a state of drowsiness but her mind resisted, a lifetime ...

Green = Comment/Corrections Black = Review * ‘We don’t like to admit it, but we are trapped by it,’ he thought. Try keeping thought in italics. He remembered how his ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * “I have failed you. My selfishness consumed me and now this! Why couldn’t I have stayed forever with you?” he ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Not like I'd take answers from him anyways. Take out the ‘s’, it should be ‘anyway’. There was no hiding ...

It was said that the city was self-sustaining and relied on no one province. No one province? I didn’t understand that bit. Creepy ending. It was a little difficult to ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * “Where had she learned that?” learned should be learnt. “With all that explained, that only leaves one question: why haven’t the Ultaraes paid ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * “Yes father,“ she bowed in the presence of the others. That end speech mark is wrong. She encased herself with magic and created ...