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Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Felix looses a lover, the clan looses a leader. You've spelt 'loses' wrong in the description. The mountainside echoed with ...

Poor Rufus. Ari, you got the character of Lucia out with the dialogue even though there was not much to describe what she actually felt towards her baby brother. And ...

Lexy, You could try adding to this. Right now it looks much like a brief outline and all you have to do is get characters involved, a short story works ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Normally, the clicking gave her a sense of power but the sound only heightened her nerves. She instinctively looked up ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Part I Fen remembered those little adventures she had had, wondering whether she would ever find new adventures in the ...

That was very hard to read. It reminds me of what bullies say, these are hurtful and I hated: I mock you! Watch me as I laugh! Ha! Ha! Ha! ...

Angel, please read the rules: 4. Before posting either your first poem or story, please write two reviews. That way more poeple will want to read yours and everyone is ...

Why are you posting a story you wrote three years ago? You can't take anything from it, and so it's pretty pointless to receive critiques on it. Post your new ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The wind howled in great gusts, blowing snow and ice against the base of a cliff. A figurein a white ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * It was a cold day in December, with the wind blowing in great icy gusts. There were people from almost ...

Well... It sure has zest. And Robin's has been done before but it begs attention. The only daughter of the Prince of Thieves....yes, that is a story to tell. There ...

Hey Jammie, I noticed a few things that could help to improve your piece: 1) When a new character speaks you should start a new paragraph because at the moment ...

I was wondering when the Boatman would appear once more. I haven't done a thorough critique but here are a few things I noticed: 1) The message on the computer, ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Indigo = Quote Black = Review * The sun broke the horizon in Halverstire to the sound of more screams as the sickness found ...

Green = Commet/Correction Blue = Suggestion Indigo = Quote Black = Review * He sighed… What was the use of ellipses here? Gary was pulling at his arm “Come on ...