MysticalBlood

ok lol. i started writing it today... :D that's why it isn't that good... i'll take all your tips and use them. :D thanks!

Thanks and I always have trouble with tenses and ways of phrasing sentences. I'll be sure to fix all that later. Thank you anyway! :D

thanks lol... i've not actually been with anyone i was just inspired and so i wrote it... actually... paramore inspired. ;) thanks!

thanks for the review...

I meant like demolition sites to build houses and stuff.

oops. that was a typo. lol.

Ok, thanks. and i wrote that before i saw batman!!!! i didn't even notice. lol. how odd... i'll go into more detail when i get my review back. ;) there'll ...

you weren't harsh lol. i was a bit like whoah. lol. :D anyway. part 2 will be up soon peeps...

OK OK. i get it. there is a lot of work that needs doing. sheeeesh. it makes me feel really awkward... anywaay, thanks everybody for your help. all is appreciated! ...

ok thanks for the help! I'll edit. :)

Ok ok... :o that was just a rough draft i gave you guys. i know i didn't describe it properly because that was just a small extract, everything comes clear ...

"She feels the stab of pain in her heart, As Alister tells her he'll be in the art, The art of the old Avalon, Where her mother is waiting feeling ...

Make it longer and I will worship you. ;) Kidding. I would seriously like it a whole lot more if there was more to review though. It looks like darko ...

I touch his soft red rosy lips, Trace the pattern with my finger tips, He grins at me and stokes my cheek, All handsome kind and totally sleek, His eyes ...

Dear iCarlyfan had you read what is posted above, you would know that this is what is known as a french sonnet, and that for this type of sonnet there ...