Mynameswriter

Yes it does seem to be missing something i'll agree with that, but i just can't figure it out. Oh wait i found it! Back story! an explanation to why ...

Wow. I am wowed. First off, I felt i could've been in Rakia's place. Every sentence every word kept you wanting more. The characters and scenery you didn't put a ...

Wow. That's powerful. I really liked how you used the imagery in this. I wouldn't even know how to critique this. Well this one flaw... "hanging in a /broken mothers ...

''But be ye not afraid,'' It should be 'But ye be not afraid.' Sorry noticed that and it was mentally annoying... Other then that i really liked. I liked how ...

''Does Prince Charming/ride a white steed?/Do princesses wait in /high towers?'' There's one prince but multiple princesses? Your going to need to fix that. More detail is needed. You could ...

I think I understood it? It's about a girl/guy who dislikes their life and moves to escape it? Please tell me if i'm wrong. I liked it though. At least ...

First off, Hello! And welcome to YWS! I'm also kinda new here if you didn't look at my profile (Probably didn't. I don't care.) Secondly, Hmm... Still finding words to ...

First off the imagery. You were okay with that. Secondly, ''From the courtyard I stand, /glancing to the sky with my gear in hand.'' What gear? I don't understand that. ...

Omg! Yes! continue this. First off, this has a really good start and i want. No i NEED to read the rest of this.You left us with mark talking to ...

Wow. Good wow. I really liked how you started this off with the simple sentence. My old school librarian told me (I was there every day basically) that a good ...

This story was good but lacked actual story... Background. i think you should put some flashbacks into this and more background knowledge for the reader. Other then that i liked ...

This was interesting. I barely understood this. You didn't paint a nice picture. You drew a sketch for this but not a beautiful picture. you needed more detail in this ...

You had a couple spelling errors in the poem but that was pointed out. You really should fix them, they were annoying. I don't get annoyed over spelling a lot ...

This was good. I really like how you described the characters and didn't just put who they were in one paragraph like some people do.i liked how you put in ...