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Re: Heaven and Hell chapter two
Short. Simple. Beautiful. I really enjoyed this. Gave some hints and a little back story. This seems 1st person so I thought I might point out that one. Part isn't. ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: Heaven and Hell chapter one
Well, isn't this something. Very good read, but I noticed in places where you used 'i' instead of 'I'. Also, "I could throw you send you back" you need a ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: The Golden Days- Chapter 1: Yeah, no, more or less an average weekday
Interesting. It seemed bunched together in some places, but very straight to the point. I like it. One problem I found though is that in the beginning, it says he ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: The WIT - Chapter 1
I liked this. The way you write is amazing and the way everything just flowed nicely. But one thing I found, was that in one part it says, '" oh ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: How To Train Your Dragon Chapter 3- That Wasn't In The Plan!
Once again good, but, if you don't mind, I found a mistake. I notice the second and third time you wrote Gobbers name, it was spelled Goober. I don't know ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: How To Train Your Dragon Chapter 2 - Training Begins
This seemed short, but I liked it. Started where the last one left off and you gave a pronunciation for the dragon's name. But, one thing that bothered me was ...
Jun 15, 2014