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Eep, a request! I'm... honored! :smt044 Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I held your hand as we said our final goodbyes. They are as soft as they were when I first ...

Eep, a request! I'm... honored! :smt044 Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: I held your hand as we said our final goodbyes. They are as soft as they were when I first ...

Hello! Music is finally here as requested! I'm so sorry this took so long. Oh dear! Everyone seems to have covered the grammar & line-by-line, so I'll skip that! Language ...

Hiya, Megan! Here for the third round. :wink: Grammar & Line-by-line Comments: Part of me was dreading the thought of spending my Saturday in a house full of posh snobs ...

Nope, it's by Barbara Conklin. I love how it got great reviews on Amazon.com, while I hate it. :)

Oh, darlings! I meant for this to be a short story, not something to be continued! I really appreciate the critiques, you guys!

Kat! *snuggles* When I saw the title, I thought, Kat's leaving? Wha? No! But, it's only for a week! Thank goodness! Cute, quirky little poem! Hope to see you back ...

Oh, dear! I guess I made a lot more mistakes than I thought I did! Haha. I should have known, considering I wrote it under a heavy lack of sleep ...

Hello, Eliza! I'm Music. :) Grammar: “I can’t , Java; it wouldn’t be right,” Mike sighed... First they had become dry as if he was stranded on land, then they ...

Hello, Eliza! I'm Music. :) Grammar: “I can’t , Java; it wouldn’t be right,” Mike sighed... First they had become dry as if he was stranded on land, then they ...

Hello! Music here to critique your "Dream". :) Grammar: [s]It was the only sound in the room that I could hear.[/s] It was the only perceptible noise in the room. ...

Hello! Music here to critique your "Dream". :) Grammar: [s]It was the only sound in the room that I could hear.[/s] It was the only perceptible noise in the room. ...

Music here to critique for you! Grammar: [alexandria] Cat, darling, capitalize this, you silly girl! Oh , no “It’s been a year.” Can it be year ? :wink: “Maybe she ...

I've posted the edited version! Thanks for all of your helpful comments. :)

Thanks. In my other poems I've posted, they rhymed and had line lengths I was careful about. For this one, I focused more on the story. I really didn't pay ...