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Oh, dear! Very short! And I haven't read any of your other chapters. Oh, well; might as well start now! :) Grammar: Lance Bold this. Being rushed to the hospital ...

Hey, Megan! I'm Music. Nice to meet you. :) Grammar: [s]No meaning[/s] Not a meaning, just a word. To some people , it's where they live, to others , it's ...

Hello, darling! I'm Music. Grammar: "If you don't cooperate with me , we are never going to get anywhere , you know." Like he cares. As long as he gets ...

Hiya, darling! Ooh, you entered? Luckily, I was not forced. :wink: Grammar: She leaned forward, her cherry red lips whispering sweet nothings , yet capturing his innocent brown eyes. Another ...

Ooh! Just reviewed the intro and was wondering when you were going to post the first chapter. Then I look, and here it is! Woo! Haha. Grammar: I felt their ...

Hello, darling! I'm Music. :) Grammar: He hurried to get the phone, but suddenly , he couldn't see. Nor could he hear, or speak, or move, or even begin to ...

Hi! I'm Music- here to critique for you today. :) Grammar: “Music [Hey- that's me!] makes one feel so romantic – at least it always gets on one’s nerves – ...

Ooh! I'm intrigued as well! Did you mean to not punctuate, though? That bothered me- just a bit. I really liked the idea of using a poem-sort-thing as your prologue. ...

Hello! I'm Music. :) Grammar: She says: -Fine. But we have to talk about it eventually. Very interesting approach to writing dialogue. I don't necessarily like it. the first paragraph ...

I didn't know there was a prologue! *smacks head* Grammar: When I was born, my mother died. One of the things I commented on in your first memory was that ...

Yay! I just love reviewing your romances, darling! [How's "My Only Sunshine" doing, by the way? :)] Grammar: With that , I stood and walked away down the street, feeling ...

Hello, darling! I'm Music. Here to review for you today! Grammar: Numbness crept across her skin like a sheet of thin satin[s],[/s] ; it sent a storm of panic fluttering ...

Hannah, darling! Sorry it took me so long! My internet is back and fully recovered. :) Grammar: My pencil scratched against the answer sheet for the full time [s]alloted[/s] allotted ...

Music, here as requested, my darling! Grammar: Shane smiled to himself, walked off the track[s],[/s] and up the bleachers. Nathan ran up to him. "Amazing," he sighed. "No words can ...

Hello, Eliza! I'm Music. :) Grammar: “I can’t , Java; it wouldn’t be right,” Mike sighed... First they had become dry as if he was stranded on land, then they ...