MuffinWriter

Do I love I don't know He doesn't act like i should show Him the love I show He sits with me at lunch one day He ignores me the ...

Its well written, and likable. Even for some, who find ourselves fitting in, its worth reading. I do advise writing more, as I think you could make a pretty long, ...

What happened to no twilight harry potter or eragon? Even more irritating then the people who brought them up anyways, the people who mentioned an individual book out of a ...

I'm not one for playing with grammar or spelling or any of the rest of it while reading. In fact, I'm impressed. It's good, and a mix of descriptive parts ...

The story line? Yeah a bit confusing. I do agree that the ryhming seems a bit forced in parts... BUT i did however enjoy the poem, and it was well ...

You’ve begun to like someone else in time. is the only thing I find off about things. It just... seems off in some way. I can't figure out how to ...

It was really good. I say you should keep writing this story. It may need more editing, and transition sentences but overall it was good. I'd check a couple of ...

Lets face it. harry potter. Eragon. twilight. a serious of unfortunait events(it never got half as big as the other 3 unfortunitly) there have been others, and there will be ...

The second chapter is a bit better then the first. It was less repetitive, and you had more then just dialog. Don't be afraid to put descriptions of things in. ...