Morrigan

1) I'm a girl, yo 2) One buttock is one uh, butt cheek. So a pair of buttocks is one butt. c:

Holy crap (will be back with adequate review later). Lovely.

If you have to defend them, it's probably time for them to go. As a great man (who I don't feel like googling, so) once said, "murder your darlings."

You are the author. I am not the author. These are suggestions. You don't have to do anything I tell you to. But I think following my suggestions would make ...

If your song is from the point of view of two different people, you need to illustrate that more clearly in the song.

OH I had no idea what Gordon was, so it threw me off. And the pounds thing... I'm embarrassed now hhahahahhaha I still stand with the phrasing, though. I've heard ...

Thank you for your input. I'd like to explain some of my choices to you. 1) "I love you," and "I know" are things that Han Solo and Princess Leia, ...

this made me queasy.

Thanks so much for the really helpful review! I took some of your suggestions to mind and I changed it. Do you think it's improved it some? Thanks again!

The narrator is remembering a moment. So the shirt still feeling warm on her cheek is a clue that this is a flashback rather than it happening right now.

Hi, danceofparchment! I appreciate your review. I chose to punctuate this poem as I would punctuate prose, so sometimes lines with no punctuation at the end happen. There are many ...

Thanks! That was really helpful!

yo grammar don't matter none in poeting it's a stylistic choice thanks

I purposely left this un-capitalized. I am an English major, and I am aware of proper capitalization. I also purposely left all punctuation out. Perhaps you should read this article ...

Hi there! Thanks for the review! I'm not disagreeing with you or anything, but could you tell me why you found the caps unnecessary? As I wrote the poem, I ...