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Re: Meditation
Hey there, like I said, I didn't mean to sound rude in my reply. I shouldn't have responded when I was tired and had just gotten off of work because ...
Jul 10, 2015 -
Re: Meditation
After looking at my reply, I can see how it might sound rough, but I didn't mean it that way! I was just trying to explain what the dashes were ...
Jul 10, 2015 -
Re: Meditation
I will not capitalize god because I do not believe in it. Dashes are used to symbolize an interruption. I suppose I'll replace it with an em dash, as it'll ...
Jul 10, 2015 -
Re: 500 Miles
You're wonderful. I was going to say the same thing.
Jul 9, 2015 -
Re: Meditation
This is the full poem. It's a love poem.
Jul 9, 2015 -
Re: Nothing's Enough
lol i guess that i just won't give you any more help then.
Jul 8, 2015 -
Re: Nothing's Enough
in that case, I would phrase it as "trapping" eyes because if the eyes are trapped, that means that they're in jail. Or set with a trap. But it would ...
Jul 8, 2015 -
Re: witchcraft
Actually, the grammatically correct way would be "I loved the dove, yet chose the vulture." You only put a comma before conjunctions, not after them.
Jul 7, 2015 -
Re: The YWS Supa Slamma Monsta Jamma
Woulda been heartbroken if you hadn't namedropped me.
Jul 3, 2015 -
Re: Love Poem No. 6
Thanks!
Jul 3, 2015 -
Re: Love Poem No. 6
Hey, I don't care if you're qualified or not. Your feedback is helpful to me. If you happen to be able to put your finger on the things I can ...
Jul 1, 2015 -
Re: Beautiful Addiction
While it does make sense after you explain, the point is not coming across in the poem. I suggest you rewrite it a little to change the tone, or to ...
Jul 1, 2015 -
Re: Love Poem No. 6
Where was the cliche? You didn't mention it in the line by line critique.
Jun 30, 2015 -
Re: Family History Repeats Itself
Thank you so much for leaving this wonderful review on my work. I appreciate that you enjoyed it. It means a lot. Thank you!
Jun 30, 2015 -
Re: Family History Repeats Itself
I do have some questions. What language did it feel like I was trying too hard with? Also, what do you mean by "overly stressed"? This would help me improve ...
Jun 29, 2015
