Hello there,
I really like this piece, its short, simple and yet its so connective with the subject. Something that could have been easily lost or forgotten in a short piece, is so visible in this one.
I really like your use of sentence structure, the short sentences just really striking the reader with the image of how the emotions are addictive and yet, so strange to others.
I really like your use of repetition in how you are describing the way they effect you, always starting with "In the way..." Its just really simple, yet very powerful when you look at the two lines together.
Overall I really enjoyed this poem. But I would really like to see you explore a different length as short poems can be really powerful, but longer ones can allow you to explore the issue or subject further.
Points: 330
Reviews: 22
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