Morrigan

Thanks!

Thank you for your review! I made some edits; do you think this is more effective?

What do you think of the edits?

Thanks!

Hey, poems don't have to be capitalized at the beginning of every line. Sometimes I don't even capitalize i because it fits the tone of the poem.

Whoa dude. Will be back to review. (little atsmai is growing up :') )

Thank you. Thank you so much. I didn't understand why I was so frustrated with how mediocre it was, but this really helped. I just needed someone to point out ...

Ah, I didn't notice the ten syllable thing. Good job on keeping that constant. I should have noticed. I took the pistols showing blood line as if the pistols had ...

You caught me red-handed!

Thank you so much. You're perfect.

Can I use that astronaut idea tho

Thank you so much. It's exactly what I needed.

Comment on this so I remember to come back and review~

Thanks, man. I appreciate it.

Hey, man, that's the best time to write poetry. Write sleepy, edit while awake, that's what I always say. ;p