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Re: trashy novels and a molten core
Hello there. First of all, you've got some pretty excellent word choice. Nice job there. I love especially "oaken voices" because you convey a lot of qualities with "oaken." Also, ...
Jan 11, 2013 -
Re: Stale Cereal
Hello there! First of all, I'm going to go section by section so I can go through it thouroughly. I. I like the way you put words together and keep ...
Jan 10, 2013 -
Re: The place we used to meet
Hey there, friend. While I can certainly relate to the feelings in this poem, I think it could use some reworking. Because it's such a serious topic, I feel like ...
Jan 10, 2013 -
Re: We rot, and rot, and rot- until we're rotten-
Hello there, friend. First of all, I appreciate that you're keeping the images consistent throughout the piece. You talk about rotting, and maggots, and death. Many poets don't stick to ...
Jan 10, 2013 -
Re: Proper Noun
Wow. This gave me shivers. "I should have caught the syllables in a jar and pickled them till summer" Is going to be stuck in my head for a long ...
Jan 7, 2013