Morrigan

Hi there, fort! Here for the poetry exchange! I really liked that you ended with the first line. It was interesting to me-- I've done it before, but this poem ...

Hi there! I'm glad that the narrator found that she was beautiful. What I think needs some work in this piece is how the narrator figures out that she is ...

Hi Tessu! Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. All right, so you have questions for this mysterious You. This isn't really poetry, it's questions to no ...

Hi there! I like the imagery that you use in this poem. I think, though, that it needs a bit of reworking. The language is quite out of date, and ...

Hello, Cats! I'm here to critique your piece! Yeah! Go nerds! I'm glad you're not ashamed to be who you are! But put a sport in front of me and ...

Hi there, feversinmirrors! Welcome to YWS! It's great to see some new faces around! So I really liked this poem. You give images, and you have a consistent tone. And ...

Hello, Laure! This is supposed to be about a character that you made up, yes? I'm assuming so, and if I'm wrong, I'd clarify your author's note at the beginning. ...

Hi there! Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. Does this switch between two people talking? If so, you need to make that clearer. As it is, ...

Hi there! For a first poem, this is pretty good! I'll take an in depth look at it, as you request in your introduction. First of all, I suggest that ...

Hi there! Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. I found this poem contradictory to itself. The narrator says in the first stanza that "we don't care." ...

Hi there, disco! Ah, slam poetry. I love a good slam poem. contradictory messages Since this is so early in the poem, it makes me think that you are going ...

Wooow, niteowl, this is great! I looked at the original, and this is an improvement. I didn't see the italics as switching POV as much as the narrator hearing what ...

Hi there, Moo, beautiful person! I think this is lovely, and it's hard to imagine that this is a first draft. I agree with Stella in that I think you ...

Hi, Nightcrawler! Wow, the imagery in this is beautiful! It takes me into swirls of dust motes and stardust, and it's really stunning. Now, this imagery does have a bit ...

Hay gurlfraaaaand~ I'm not used to this frankly talking to the reader thing, but I kind of like it. Poems sometimes not to be poems, but paintings, but this poem ...