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Re: Lunar Blaze Chapter 5
Alrighty, I'm not Very good at reviewing, But I'm giving it a shot. This is very well written. I didn't find anything weird with the story itself and only a ...
May 24, 2012 -
Re: Kidnapped, the true story of me
Alright, first things first, paragraph breaks. every couple of sentences, Hit the enter key and leave a line clear. It'll help the reader understand it better. Secondly, Pace yourself. Slow ...
May 21, 2012 -
Re: From Where We Started - 1: 1
The village cried to me to put it out of misery, however, I could not undo this nor could I stop it. It was far too late. It was already ...
Apr 21, 2012 -
Re: Will of Kastha Prologue: Edit 1
Wow, Very descriptive. This entire thing seems to give off a slight air of tension (as you no doubt intended.) and the emotions of the characters are realistic and natural. ...
Apr 11, 2012 -
Re: Mud
Wow. Very powerful imagery. Reminded me very much of "Warhammer 40,000" Which is a wonderfully good thing. There were a couple typos like "Hardly a cloud in the sky, if ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: Untitled Book- chapter 1.
I actually really liked this even though its not quite what I normally read. Very attention grabbing. At least to me. Very descriptive while It also doesn't over complicate. Anyway, ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: Deleted
Ok, First off, this scares me. O.o Which is a good thing. Second, awesome. Just. Plain. Awesome. Drowning scares the crap out of me. I love to swim, hate to ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Voiceless
Very interesting. I do agree with the other reviewers about the spacing of a particular word. Variety is the spice of life and all that. Basically the advice already given ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Degeneration One Chapter 1
Really liked it! The details were really cool, like the excel nod or the "admin" username. one thing I need to point out is this, “The south! The south!” called ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Boots on the Ground
I love this. the imagery is great. Although, It does seem like he's alone though, which is weird, since it violates rule 1 of combat. but other than that I ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Souls
Very Interesting. It drew me in even though this type of book isn't normally my forte. This bit, ("I could hear contempt in his voice. He turned around, opened the ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Deleted
I really like this! It's very.... "Steampunk" It was really a great read. I can't attest to grammatical errors, but the guy talking to Ulrich while putting him to sleep ...
Aug 9, 2011