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I should add, that yes, these reviewers that came after me are right--maybe redo it, take more time, explain more deeply. I realize this was a dare, however, it is ...

Chicken Fries? Those sound good. They are. :D

I like it. Great job, nice follow-up for the first chapter. I don't have time for a full review, but I will later if you want.

I don't have time for a full review right now, but I will say this: Poetry is just like every other form of writing. You need to capitalize on each ...

If a story have words such as this, (see above), then I suggest rating it so kids don't see.

I liked this poem a lot. I didn't see anything wrong with it; but maybe you should add some similies, or metaphors. That would help. Like 'without you I will ...

You're welcome. :) If you ever needed a full review, seeing as mine there was rather short, feel free to ask.

Sorry. Misunderstood; maybe, though, you could focus in on one character a bit. I'm not sure, it's your story.

I enjoyed this section of your story a ton! Espescially the last line. It will stick with me forever, very memorable. 'This is our confession' is a great line. I ...

I read your poem; and I just had to read this. Loved it just as much. Keep writing!

I liked this poem a lot. It was different, but definetly a poem. Very emotionally deep; you can tell it was real. Sorry for whatever happened.

I think everyone covered it all here. Though I have to post how much I love the poem; espescially the end. Nice job; you're a great poet by nature, I ...

Love the poem. Might check out the story--you said it's under fantasy fiction, correct? I wonder why she's not sure... Hmm. I guess if I don't want to stay up ...

I like the poem a lot! It's really good. I can find nothing to criticize, and I don't think others will either. It's a great poem, all in all...which is ...

Everyone seems to have covered it. Make us feel your MC's pain! Help us sympathize her. Use descriptive words. Make sure your scene is clear to us. someone else said, ...