Misty

I didn't understand it until the very end, plus the end rhymed and the rest didn't, but I did like the ending---the rest was too confusing for me

thank ya. but I still don't feel like critting this now. L8er though, for sure. I'm happy I'm going to FLORIDA

he is, isn't he

Lol ur both funny. I liked the poem. I thought it was deep. And funny, in a sort of sarcastic way. Nice repitition.

er...I don't understand it. :lol: uh...what's it about?

meh. I'm not gonna finish your crit until you acknowledge me.

I like it and I hope you keep on writing

you're right. I should write an outline. :D thanks for the idea. And no, it doesn't change viewpoints every chapter. It needs to be vague. Besides, this is nothing, if ...

er...you sort of lost me, lol. But hey...sure...okay. :D like sams aid, random emotional rants are it all the time.

oh...wow. K, definately not my kind of poem...since I'm probably just like your friend (without thes stuck-uppy-ness) But I did like the ending of it though. "Well, I'll call you ...

that was for J Wilder I didn't see ur post when I wrote that but thanks. I'm trying to slow it down thanks for the crit!

First thing- I'm a coastal native american, Shoalwater Bay. Our reservation is on the coast of Washington State. So you know I was totally feeling this poem from the first ...

uh...he doesn't like or trust the boys in his dorm, because they ask him all sorts of personal questions (that's in the revision) but he does end up asking them. ...

No that's not what I meant. It's a GOOD poem, it's just not my style. *Revivies poem* There. I brought it back.

thanks!