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Re: Tomatoism Spain's New National Religion
Ohmygoodness. *Dies laughing.* This is the epitome of good satire. My very favorite part, "IT'S NOT TOMAHTO!" This is written in such good review style, perfect emulation of a journalist, ...
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Re: Untitled
I am your Most Reluctant Audience. I am the reader you are going to have to reach--and there's a whole troupe of us out there. Even though there are people ...
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Re: Baa Baa Black Sheep
Grammatical errors abound. Broken sentences, run on sentences, and so on. I can't be very helpful, because you didn't hold my attention long enough for me to finish it. It ...
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Re: The Twins
Hi, Berry! You're doing a great job here. It's really impressive that out of thirty four posts, 21 are reviews. I'm really proud of you and welcome to the site! ...
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Re: 1,000 Ways to Kill
I read it! All I can say is...infodump! Okay, and The Godfather reincarnated. The biggest issue with this story is that we've seen it fact we've seen it many times, ...
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Re: your talk is cheap
You're a doll. Absolutely wonderful. I'll tell you what, I could never write like this when I was thirteen. (And thirteen is not so young...) This had real passion, and ...
Sep 3, 2007 -
Re: Gum
You use extremely strong imagery, some repeated. The part about words sticking to your insides was pure genius. The entire song really, rivaled Kelly Clarkson for a breakup bash. It ...
Sep 3, 2007 -
Re: My Marine
Hey Amber. I see you're new. It's wonderful to have you. Your post count is impressive for it having been two days. good job on reviewing so much already! That's ...
Sep 3, 2007 -
Re: Compared
Sweetie, it's fine, you're young. Writers don't like to read thing like this, they're too easy. I can get feeling jealous, but this isn't even jealousy, this is simple inadequacy. ...
Sep 3, 2007 -
Re: You'll Forget
Oh Penguin, sweetie, please just ignore Brad. He has only one review setting: "This is horrible, toss it." I actually remember one hilarious post of his on a poem, "What ...
Sep 3, 2007 -
Re: He loves her
This doesn't suck at all. If you want to see the utter crap that I was writing at your age, check out the sadly reincarnated "screaming roses" that Gadi critiqued...(oh ...
Sep 3, 2007 -
Re: X
Chilling. But I have no idea what was going on. ;) The first paragraph was especially good. I didn't think I'd like it to begin with but it grabbed me. ...
Sep 3, 2007 -
Re: Princess
Hmm...I can say I didn't like it ;) It didn't hold my attention. I'll tell you that writing from a dog's point of view isn't an exactly original idea. I ...
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Re: The Cab Driver
Hey, First off--good story. It's like the resurrection of the decent short story. The characters were really believable, the scenery was interesting, descriptions, beautiful. It's funny how this feels
Sep 2, 2007 -
Re: The Four Princesses of Illyria Comments
*smiles* Ari, you're cute. You have a Princess infatuation. It's adorable. There's not a lot I can say about this piece. Your writing is crisp and sound, your characters fairly ...
Sep 2, 2007
