MissGangamash

Hello! Ah, yeah, I see what you mean about the timing. I'll sort that out somehow. Ooh, I actually like the idea of having the music still playing. Cheers for ...

Hello! I'm glad you've caught up on the earlier chapters before reading this one because of the shift in the storyline that will follow what's happened. Nico is a big ...

I can't really say much because I know you've caught up now so anything I say will be pretty redundant haha. Now you know how Caius and Evie first met, ...

Hello! Thank you, thank you, thank you for all your kind words! :D Yeah, this chapter had a bit of a recap of what's been going on so that's helpful ...

Hello! This chapter is actually 13 A4 pages long so in this format it was a bit too dauntingly huge and I know its not fun reading big chunks of ...

Hello! I'll take all your points into consideration. I put the explanation about Nico in because he hasn't been in it for a while and I thought the recap would ...

Hello! This is the first chapter I have uploaded that is this long. I've been re-editing the novel and putting chapters together so they end at better points and there ...

Hello! I'm glad the chapters you have read make you want to read the whole thing, that's a good sign :) I'll keep what you've said about paragraphs and sentences ...

I pictured Richie as about 7/8. Ah, I see what you mean about musky, I'm going to edit out 'naked bulb' too because a kid wouldn't really call it naked. ...

Indeed, what Ineedy0u said. Richie has a mental disorder and he has created Luca himself as a coping mechanism. Richie was being abused and neglected by his mum and one ...

Thank you so much! I've been trying to work on a novel about multiple personality disorder but it's not really working at the moment so I decided to write the ...

I didn't mean in the narrative, I meant in the dialogue. And using 'the girl' in the narrative would probably work better in my opinion. It would show Night's lack ...

Hello! Damn I was proud of that fight scene, which are the bane of my existence! Anyhooo, the chorographical element was intentional. Alexander and Varsee have been fighting side by ...

Hello! I know there's a lot of dialogue, it's a character based novel. It is intentional and I know it's not to everyone's taste. I don't think you can really ...

Thank you so much for the review! I know it's hard to review a one off chapter if it's in the middle of a story so thanks for taking the ...