MissGangamash

I'm not great with poetry so I can't really comment on structure and stuff. But I really enjoyed this! As a single person who loves being single, it spoke to ...

Happy review day! I haven't read the prologue so bear with me. I shall review as I read. 'The mahogany door swings open and a glum, dark-haired boy traipses out. ...

Hello! Happy Review Day! I haven't read any of the previous chapters so please bare with me. First off, I'm not a massive far of third person, present tense narrative ...

Right, seeing as this is a short chapter and there isn't that much going on in it, I can't really comment much about the story itself. I didn't see any ...

I'm here as requested! I found a couple of errors so I'll point them out first then give you an overall review. 'from good-feelings overflow.' - I think 'good-feelings overload' ...

Happy Review Day! This is a great, intriguing prologue. You have given just enough to keep the reader wanting more and the writing itself is well done and easy to ...

Happy Review Day! I'll start with nitpicks I see as I'm reading: 'Damon had informed her that his friend would come over later,' - you should specify Ivy first before ...

Happy Review Day! Your writing is incredible! Are you really 13? I'm gobsmacked. I love the descriptions of the world you have created although I have to admit I thought ...

Happy Review Day! I haven't read the previous chapters so I can't comment on the story as a whole, just this chapter. The small chunks of texts from different points ...

Damn, I was beaten to the first review! Anyhooo... 'I just think they’d be as well testing us on something that might actually be useful to the ship,' - this ...

'Steve had learnt early on not to question Mr Pondek’s logic. It existed independently of all other logic in the universe.' - I like this detail, it adds good depth ...

'For the entire rest of his call with his parents,' - 'for the entirety of his call,' or 'for the rest of his call'. Entire and rest are the same ...

“Clearly you don’t Treego.” Chip snarled, - comma before Treego. 'Chip snarled again and folded his arms across his chest. Front legs?' - I'm pretty sure monkey's have arms and ...

“That’s my gran and grandpa,” Louis murmured, reaching a paw out to the screen. - Monkey's have hands not paws. 'Louis’ nodded and wiped his eyes.' - no need for ...

You took a bit too long to tell us that Louis was a spider monkey. There's three paragraphs between his introduction and the reader knowing what animal it is, it ...