Minjeong

Hey, nice start! Here are a few suggestions for improvement: -make sure you proof-read. All your "i"s are lower-case. -maybe write more elaborate lines about how long or desperately you ...

Wow this is really cool and creepy. I started reading this because my name is "Min" and am glad to have done so. I just have a few minor comments ...

Really great hook! I was immediately enchanted by your choice of words. When you wrote... "As my mother began to open the door a tall, well built (!!) man pushed ...

You're a really good writer! This immediately captures the reader's attention because it's about a killer. :P I think you did really great, starting right into the story and making ...

Wow it's pretty good! :D I thought you could add just a bit more description into it or like add more feelings. I hope you can edit and revise this ...

This is really good! -First, I think you could put it into paragraphs so that it doesn't look like a blob of writing. Then more people would read ur writing, ...

This is scary. I thought this was awesome, but maybe you could have included a bit more feelings during or before the countdown? Maybe something like: "I see a foot ...