MillarS

Really great, long, descriptive passage. Really good vocabulary and you can really picture everything in the story. Try paragraphing more, I got a little lost in the massive text! I ...

A really great, moving piece. Simple and flowing with good rhythm. I love the question/answer thing, makes the poem that little more unique and different from the others. Really good ...

Oh, that's funny! Totally straight to the point! Love the names you picked! Simple beginning, keep on writing! Best lines: "...now go on and have an adventure, for me." "Wait, ...

Really really long piece, but still great. Try paragraphing more, I got a bit mixed up at what part I was at when I was reading it. The description is ...

Wow. This is really good! So descriptive and a good length to squash eveything you have managed to into! Some really good vocabulary used, like how "wolfish", "sneering" and "revenge" ...

I think this is truely amazing! Very descriptive. It is slightly similar to a story idea I had, how you have rhetorical questions, and how well-worded the whole piece is. ...

These are really amazing lyrics and are like Trading Yesterday lyrics bit. They can mean so much to the person who wrote it and to the person it's aimed at. ...

I love how much detail you have put into this! I really love how people can twist these words into something as amazing as this! Your descriptiveness is amazing as ...