MiaParamore

Hi beautiful, A nice story and a brilliantly written chapter :D .I just have one problem, "This sickened me, that they thought we were so cowardly" You shouldn't use 'cowardly' ...

Hi Beautiful Doom There's one thing I can definitely say about your story that it held my attention all the time I was reading it. I have read many stories ...

Hi, :elephant: I liked this chapter more than the last one in terms of narration.I felt myself really there with the narrator.Nothing to nit-pick.Really interseting story.Keep going,jasmine.Please PM

hi, I liked the story but I think it was way too short for first chapter.I don't have much to point out but I think when you describe something it ...

Hi So long you have been reviewing me but now it's my chance. Well,there wasn't much in the prologue but has really aroused my curiosity of the plot.I am going ...

hi killthelights The plot is really very interesting.I would love to read more and more.I really read it quickly so i didn't find any flaws as such except for: 'Smiling, ...

Hi, It is a nice story.But I think you have brought in half of the story in one chapter only. The climax is nice but you write really short sentences ...

Hi Hannah :D I read your story but sorry to say it couldn't grab my attention.Maybe too little was posted.Your character 'Megan' is being really weird.Abusing mother is not good.I ...