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Haha it's fine. I used to make my reviews mostly on nitpicks and grammar, but I've learned over time that honestly it doesn't matter that much in the first draft. ...

Maybe im just tired but that was hysterical to read %uD83D%uDE02%uD83D%uDE02

I think tour ages are fine. You just seem to present Janet in the beginning as the more dominating "mom" presence. Like when she says "finally gonna pull your weight?" ...

Just to poke in... xD Pande is right about the walking in silence thing; I thought similarly. I would say to just cut he cart scene, but the little bit ...

Well i love both xD but second in this instance.

Hahaha i got you. I loved that movie!

Haha yeah it makes sense. Honestly i think if you worked those ideas in a little but more it would have actually made this a pretty relatable story for a ...

hey felistia! It's ok im so bad at reviewing on time :P I did not catch that error with the sliced hand! o.O good point there. Also I'll fix some ...

love this! I'm a green man myself. Don't like or dislike blue. it's just often overused. Nothing to review on. Excellent wording and imagery. Keep going! ~Messy

yay glad i could actually help. Been ages since I reviewed anything XD For my stories i won't spoil anything, buuuut it's more in the stages of where it becomes ...

thanks for the review! I'll look at those parts and see if I think they should be changed. Thanks for the input. ~Messy

thanks for the review! yes, there is going to be a lot more on magic and wizardry :) ~Messy

Hey Attol! Thanks for the awesome reviews!! you seem to have a thingy for opening paragraphs XD I agree though that it's super wordy. I just wanted to paint a ...

they're all right here!

I just edited those two sentences if you;d like to see them, as well