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Lol maybe I should roll with Xerox. He hasn't been mentioned before so your goldfish brain is safe. And you're spot on again with Devlin's side quests lol that goes ...

Lol maybe I should roll with Xerox. He hasn't been mentioned before so your goldfish brain is safe. And you're spot on again with Devlin's side quests lol that goes ...

Bahaha welcome to the Club I guess. I'm actually glad you pointed out the dialogue tagging because that's been on my mind a lot recently. Dialogue is where I feel ...

Haha if it SEEMS off it probably is so just yell %uD83D%uDE02

Yeah. Any continuity errors you see PLEASE point out because that will easily be the biggest part of rewrites. I've changed, not just in some of the plot but also ...

Haha good points for sure. Hopefully that was improved in the more recent chapters, you'll just have to let me know!

Well to Sadoria he's not and this is from that perspective so yknow

Hey there. Thanks. I do feel like I could remove a few words throughout. It's a personal preference of mine to usually not punctuation at the ends of lines, but ...

Haha thanks. Feel free to reas through the rest to catch up! I'm slowly writing %uD83D%uDE1B

Thanks for the reviews. Bouillion is not a great guy lol I'll keep the dialogue tagging in mind

yes, things will make more sense as you read the preface to this conversation xD

Williwaw probably needs a good grammatical edit beware %uD83D%uDE02

And if two guys show up in jeans, and plaid, and one has a leather jacket and a deep voice, driving a black 70 Impala, you should probably move states

Rings of Power is a precursor to the Lord of the Rings and Hobbit, but I would NOT recommend it xD it has a plethora of issues. I LOVE the ...

For the most part I think it moves pretty well. You have a lighter style than mine in regards to detail and description, but that doesnt make either one wrong. ...