Messenger

OK, kind of really creepy poem here. Her's my review as I said. This poem is really scary, and you did a good job of creating a sense of fear ...

OK, here to review as promised. Or did I promise? Anyway. This poem is well written, although I don't care for free-verse poems as much as rhyming ones, this one ...

Here to review as a Knight of the Green Room. Great suspense, I noticed you have some of your dialogue that should be in separate lines, but other than that ...

Here to review for the Knights of the Green Room. Glad to see part 4 is finally here. So I noticed right off that you have a dialogue line within ...

Here to review for the Knight of the Green Room This poem obviously has two different sides, but it was very well written and rhymed almost perfectly except for the ...

The Messenger here to review for the Knights of the Green Room. What I'm going to do on this review is post problems as I see them, and then put ...

Ah! just got to say that before I even began reading the first paragraph, I love how you start out the chapter with Initializing . . . That makes it ...

the Craig slowly pivots to keep his eyes on the machine and steps That sounds hilarious to me, although i know it is only a typo. At the point where ...

OKOKOKOKOK. sorry, but this is so dumb. I got one paragraph and was finished. whether this story is supposed to poorly written (That;s an understatement) when you write it this ...

Hey, here to review for the Knights of the Green Room. This chapter was pretty good. I haven't read previous chapters (something I don' usually do) but I easily understood ...

Here for the knights of the Green Room. Wow, that is so imaginative and vividly descriptive, with interesting metaphors. I especially like the last stanza. The part with the fireflies ...

Alright, those small details you added really do help with the story. i noticed a problem at the beginning though. “Piper!” A voice whispers from across the hall. I scowl ...

This was an awesome poem. Every line fits perfectly. I like the blank lines, then I am someone who doodles, so that is something I relate to as well. My ...

This is a really good beginning, but I have a few suggestions. Use a little more time to describe the girls coming to their father. Show a little more him ...

Hahahahahaha. This so funny Rydia. I love the quick rhyming and fast-paced stanzas. The first three lines are so random and funny. Thy instantly brought a smile to my face. ...