Merry_Haven

*LilyJamey~ (love the name, by the way) Here are my thoughts & comments while reading this. * Book to Book ~ I couldn't really tell what was happening in the ...

*psouth~ Here are my thoughts and comments while reading this second chapter. * A girl's mind ~ Do you have any sisters or have any chicks around you? Because the ...

*Aubree~ Here are some thought & comments while reading. *Show & Tell ~ Remember going to kindergarten and doing show and tell? Where you would show and describe your stuff. ...

*psouth~ Hello, there. Here are the thoughts & comments while reading this piece. * Dear Diary ~ I can picture Emma having and writing in a diary. Hence for being ...

*kiwiauthor_13~ Hello, kiwi. (do you like kiwi's by any chance?) I like to share my thoughts with you about this chapter one. Usually I have problems with telling when reading ...

*kiwiauthor_13~ Here are some comments & thoughts while reading: * Nothing ~ When you say that he means nothing to your MC, doesn't that sound a little rude? Was he ...

Hey, Bri. I'm just going to point out the mistakes that didn't seem right here. Otherwise, everyone did an amazing job with everything else. The leaves quivered at the wind’s ...

*Angel of Death~ Here are my thoughts and comments while reading... * Just a little side note ~ Oh, man. A writer's break down? That must be terrible, Angel. When ...

*XxBrokenVainxX~ Here are some comments and thoughts while reading... * My first thought ~ While reading it seemed a little cliche. The whole girl liking best guy friend. I've read ...

*ashleylee~ Here are some thoughts and comments while reading... * Just a little side note ~ You know, I'm always up to your new stories. And I do enjoy them, ...

Ah well, I already another surprise in store, might as well spill the beans. There's something missing in this sentence. Try,... Ah well, I already have... , the word have ...

*JC~ Hello. These are some comments and thoughts while reading One ... * Just a little side note ~ If this is in third person, then it's okay. I have ...

The only grammar pointer I found was... My boss glanced up from his computer. “Take to Jean, I think he handles all the keys.” I think you're trying to say, ...

*Meep(:~ Here are some thoughts and comments when reading this prologue... * They're just kids after all ~ I have to say Meep, I smiled when I read this. And ...

*ashleylee~ Here are my thoughts and comments when reading... * Bryce and nothing else ~ I noticed that you described Bryce a lot within this story. And I also noticed ...