Megrim

Back again and today I thought I might talk about writing principles in more generalities. I'm in two minds about this chapter, so I'm not sure what to say. On ...

Same deal - reading and typing at the same time. Werewolves sell! I didn't anticipate that. I thought he'd be out to kill them just to be rid of them. ...

Reading as I review this one. I'm a little confused about what the 'wolves in high places' paragraph is trying to say. I don't quite follow how that relates to ...

Initially, I felt like Seb was more aimless than I'd expect. Wouldn't he try to come up with an immediate goal, like "find a place to hunker and hide" or ...

Hi! Back after a short break from the story, so I hope I don't forget any important details. I read this through before, so now am rereading it to refresh ...

Alrighty! So this time I want to address a few prose/sentence-level things that I've left unsaid, but I'll get back to the big stuff afterward. Dialogue tags: You can use ...

Alrighty so we get to meet some great characters here, my favourite being Paula. She's fantastic and I just adore her. I hope we get to see lots more of ...

Onto chapter 4 and the story's picking up more and more. This is probably the best chapter so far, and we get some really good tension in here as her ...

So onto chapter three, and the story's hitting more of its stride now. As a side note, another argument for removing ch 1 is tone. These two chapters have a ...

Onto number two, and I was quite right--our inciting incident is when Ryouma arrives at the bar! Now stuff is happening! Yay. How about this for an opening: Hilda is ...

Hi there! Megrim here ready to embark on QUITE the journey. In the interest of plowing through all the chapters, I'm going to look at this more beta-read style as ...

Hi there! Excited to see a new chapter, and some big developments. Obviously, the shade was the most interesting part of this chapter. You didn't hold back, either--the chapter opened ...

Finally got to the chapter you actually asked for, lol :P Another fun chapter, which ends with a strong hook to pique my curiosity. It did raise a lot of ...

I'm a little unclear on how Seb feels about being a wolf. He didn't seem too bothered by his werewolfiness before, but this chapter starts with him thrilled that his ...

This time, I'm going to read through and type down my comments as I come across them. --- "The stranger had given chase after him." - This is in past ...