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Thank you so much! I think you've done a great job of articulating what's missing from this scene, and it's super helpful. Behind-the-scenes-fact: Ayda being a carver at all came ...

Hm, probably chapter 7 or 8. But if you're burning to leave a comment at any point, feel free, even if it's not a full-fledged review. Thanks again!

Thanks for the reviews! They are much appreciated, but if you want, feel completely free to skip reviewing a lot of these beginning chapters and just read them, as I ...

I can definitely see what you mean by the cliche/cheesy strips. For some reason I seem unable to not write cliche/cheesy stuff in beginning chapters, but I'm pretty sure it ...

Hm, Cinder wasn't supposed to come across as thinking they'd fail (though he is being more realistic about it than Ayda), just as realizing that it'd be more useful if ...

xD I already want to shred the first half of this opening because bleh. Anyway, thanks for the review!

The timelines are (mostly) synced. So yes, Madeline has been gone for several days now. And yes, her parents are worried sick.

Yeah, playing with the size differences has been the most interesting part of this whole thing because on the one hand, everything looks huge to Ayda, but on the other ...

Oh, and thanks for the review!

I feel like she cares about adventuring more than her family. That is exactly the point. She's being selfish. Though I do want her to be somewhat sympathetic, so I ...

Yeah, Ayda's definitely starting to develop as a person and I'm glad you can see that! :D

...Crap, Yeah, I posted this in the wrong order. There should be a part before this that I'll get to posting right now. (This is what happens when you're a ...

Thanks as always for the review! The paragraph spacing for that bit of dialogue was correct - Ayda's the one asking how many survivors there are, which Tel knows because ...

I tend to forget description of clothing, so thanks for reminding me about that. Madeline isn't naked - she's wearing jeans and a shirt. I'm not going to do a ...

Pick a random town in the United States. Does it have a secure border? No - you can just walk/drive in. It's the same way in Ayda's town. There's a ...