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Tbh, I was going with "fairies can easily fly as fast as humans can walk" when calculating travel time, but I'm not sure how to incorporate tiny wagons into that. ...

It's aimed at a 12-14 age group, so sort of young, but I've never been really happy with the fight anyway and I'll be trying to make it more intense.

Yeah, my intent was for Ayda to feel a little bit isolated as everyone is getting ready, and looking back I can see that I skipped over that a bit ...

Don't worry, you didn't sound mean! Ayda can sort of understand animals (not really speak their language) but that wouldn't work here because later Madeline is going to need to ...

That makes a lot of sense! Thanks for the explanation. :D

How do they speak the same language? I don't know if you address this later, but if you don't, I really think you ought to. I was wondering when someone ...

Thanks for another review! Ayda's about a foot tall, and the lock is pretty big (think old-fashioned skeletal locks) so really she can stick most of her arm in there.

Thanks for the feedback! You're definitely right about her getting over it too quickly. True story: for the entire first draft up until this exact scene, Ayda wasn't a sculptor. ...

Six APs? Wow. Are you planning on taking all 6 exams? (At my school, if we take the subject we're required to take the exam.) Trying to write a bunch ...

Check the end of 2.1 again - I think you missed a few paragraphs. And yes, her running away is new! You don't remember how she got there last time ...

Thanks for the review! Yeah, this is meant to be high-end middle grade/low end YA. So 12-14 audience. You'll learn a lot more about the magic as time goes on ...

I will definitely tweak the things you mentioned. And I'm really glad Ayda's character arc is working for you! :D

I was thinking that part of the reason Madeline is quick to trust Ayda is because she is a fairy, and even though fairies aren't supposed to be real, they're ...

Hm, maybe I was a bit too quick in getting rid of Tel. I wanted to focus on Madeline and Ayda, but the scene might be more interesting with him ...

Thank you so much! I think you've done a great job of articulating what's missing from this scene, and it's super helpful. Behind-the-scenes-fact: Ayda being a carver at all came ...