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Re: The Mage and the Immortal Chapter 17
Alright, let's get to this one. The first scene with Arthur and Nyx's mother was really interesting when I first read it because I assumed that Arthur would turn out ...
Tue Jan 23, 2018 3:31 am -
Re: The Mage and the Immortal Chapter 16
Back again as usual! The placement of the first scene felt strange - for one thing, before I hadn't been sure if Freya's match had ended yet or if her ...
Tue Jan 23, 2018 3:08 am -
Re: The Mage and the Immortal Chapter 15
You had to have noticed, right? Or are you just that dense? He’s visited this school with his father countless times. It’s been having an effect on him, ever since ...
Tue Jan 23, 2018 2:27 am -
Re: Seltas's first kill
Hey there camusic! I'm here to give you the review you asked for in my Will Review for Food thread. First off, I really liked this! I think this is ...
Mon Jan 22, 2018 11:40 am -
Re: The Mage and the Immortal Extra Chapter 2 (14.2)
Back as usual. I can’t. I can’t sit back down. His punches ached, but this one stung badly. I think he broke a rib. My father noticed, as he crouched ...
Mon Jan 22, 2018 11:07 am -
Re: The Mage and the Immortal Chapter 14.1
Alright, I'm back. I saw your wall post, but I thought I'd go ahead and review these anyway since I put in the work to read the rest of the ...
Sun Jan 21, 2018 11:14 am -
Re: The Mage and the Immortal Chapter 13
Hey Thundah. I just spent an hour or so reading through all the parts of this so I can review all the ones still in the Green Room. Before I ...
Sun Jan 21, 2018 2:15 am -
Re: Chapter 13.2: Gael
I knew it was a trap! (Okay, actually, I didn't, but I 100% expected them to get caught.) For me, the most fascinating part about this was everyone's reaction to ...
Fri Jan 19, 2018 1:41 am -
Re: Chapter 13.1: Gael
Yes, we're finally here! :D Pan is way too good at covering every bit of critique, but I'll see what I can come up with This is a well-executed part. ...
Fri Jan 19, 2018 1:10 am -
Re: Quick-writes and Short stories
Hey there! I thought I'd drop by for a quick review today to get this out of the Green Room. Yeah, this doesn't quite belong here as a literary work. ...
Sun Jan 14, 2018 9:23 am -
Re: The Shifter Chronicles- Chapter 2
Hey there! This has been sitting in the Green Room far too long without any reviews, so I'm here to help rescue it. I also went ahead and read your ...
Sun Jan 14, 2018 2:22 am -
Re: For Freedom/Four: Three Days to Run
Hey Vivian! Sorry for the delay in reviewing this, but I'm here now. Escape! Definitely exciting. I really like Korra, by the way. She's brave and practical and also really ...
Sat Jan 06, 2018 11:50 pm -
Re: The Angels of Terre
Hey there! I'm here for what will be a pretty quick review on this lovely Review Day. I like how you immediately create conflict and suspense in the opening, with ...
Sat Dec 30, 2017 11:50 pm -
Re: void 4 - body
So, I went back and read the other parts in addition to this, and this is cool. Current guess for whatever void is is either some kind of android or ...
Sat Dec 30, 2017 11:36 pm -
Re: The Mage and The Immortal Chapter 12
Hey there, I'm back. Avery makes me laugh, but she also makes me cringe because of *course* she assumed that she didn't have to do any work because Finn would ...
Sat Dec 30, 2017 11:17 pm
