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K, this was good. Very cute and snappy. The sun looks down on the earth every day . It wishes it could go down to play. To swim in the ...

Hmm, this was interesting and I'm not altogether sure I get the meaning, but it was kinda of cool. Blue; ocean, endless like the sky that is your back-drop, K, ...

I like this one a lot! It's amusing, light and you have good imagery. I lie there each morning, innocently sleeping, when my silence is ruptured, by a horrible beeping. ...

I like the message a lot, I really do. It wasn't exactly what I thought someone would you to portray that, but it was kind of refreshing because of that. ...

Not bad. Not my favorite, (personal taste) but it's OK. He looked out at the beach, she sat safely within his reach. He spoke to the three, who gazed smiling ...

K, good job a creating an interesting image in my mind. It's quite beautiful really, but what bugged me was you going in and out of past and present tense. ...

Adam kinda covered what I was gonna say. I don't get the poem, yet it's interesting and neat in a storybook kind of way. I lost interest through-out as it ...

K, first off, I liked the originality aspect of it. Interesting, yet not too interesting, (as in boring, interesting, lol) I have a couple issues with this, though. You use ...

Wow, very dark and very expressive for such a short piece! Bravo! The rhyming did not seem forced, very natural and easy to read, however, you have quite a lot ...

First off, I can tell this is an interesting piece. You have a lot of emotion in here, but I kept getting the feeling that you're not displaying it in ...

First off, the rhyming is throwing me off. It seems very forced an unnatural making it hard to read. It is an interesting piece, and overall I liked it, but ...

Prologue. Red - changes Purple -comments Green - take out The sun bled through the cracks of the boards that covered the windows and striped the clothing of the child ...

This is awesome! I love it, mainly because it's a story, has a moral, has unforced rhyme, AND it's well-written and easy to read and imagine! :) Gonna check out ...

This made me smile! I loved it :) I agree that "somewhen" should be changed, as that is not actually a word, and kinda confused/bothered me. Also, "our works will ...

First of all, this should be divided in the decent stanzas. Right now it's confusing and hard to read, try cleaning that up a bit. Red - corrections Green - ...