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K, good job a creating an interesting image in my mind. It's quite beautiful really, but what bugged me was you going in and out of past and present tense. Here, I'll show you:
Sweet poem!
suggestions, to be precise?
Hi!
I like the poem a lot. It gives a nice creepy image. But I do have some comments.
Why are the last two lines of the first para that long? It can be split and right now it looks like you wrote it that way to force a rhyme. The rhyme should come in a flow. I think the first line of your second stanza could do with some tweaking.
I like the last stanza.